Magazine Article One Evaluation

My article was a game review about a recent release called shadow of Mordor. I covered the three main aspects of the game but I wish I could have gone into some more detail on the certain features. I felt that I waffled a bit and I could have been more direct. Another aspect I could improve on is its length I felt that it was too long for a magazine article; I needed to condense my writing so that I still had relevant information but shorten its length. Another aspect I could have improved on was its presentation, for a magazine article it was limited aesthetically and was not overall an appealing piece to look at.

Overall I felt like it was a good first try but in the future I need to make my articles somewhat shorter and to the point whilst making them more aesthetically pleasing by adding pictures and also laying out the text better rather than the traditional essay format.